Summary

Writing is like a good watch — it should run smoothly and have no extra parts.

修改對于寫作十分重要。文中的例子沒有語法錯誤，條理清晰，但是沒有讓讀者跟著作者的思路走下去，風格也有些平淡，這就需要不斷的修改。主要修改的點在于調整次序，讓文章更緊湊，關鍵點更清晰，也要注意語言的抑揚頓挫，保持文字的活力，讓讀者跟著你的思路走。

Vocabulary

nudge

Over the years, however, many women wrote to nudge me about this.
nudge本意為用肘輕推，輕觸，此處解釋為to push somebody/something gently or gradually in a particular direction，可作比喻。
e.g. She tried to nudge him into changing his mind (= persuade him to do it).
[造句] He nudged the discussion towards the effect of air pollution.

pregnant

I don’t like baseball movies that go into slow motion when the batter hits a home run, to notify me that it’s a pregnant moment.
pregnant最常見的意思是懷孕的，此處為意義重大的，意味深長的。
[造句] There was a pregnant pause before the final result was announced.

humdrum

I like to replace a humdrum word with one that has more precision or color.
乏味的，單調的
[造句] Without interest, writing will be humdrum.

drab

I like to rephrase a drab sentence to give it a more pleasing rhythm or a more graceful musical line.
缺乏色彩的，單調的，乏味的
[造句] I feel so drab under the grey sky.