Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about how governments should measure their countries’ progress. While economic progress is of course essential, I agree with those who believe that other measures of progress are just as important. (開頭段作者給出了自己的立場,從just as important可以看出來,作者認為兩者同樣重要)
There are three key reasons why economic growth is seen as a fundamental goal for countries.Firstly, a healthy economy results in job creation, a high level of employment, and better salaries for all citizens. Secondly, economic progress ensures that more money is available for governments to spend on infrastructure and public services. For example, a government with higher revenues can invest in the country's transport network, its education system and its hospitals. Finally, a strong economy can help a country’s standing on the global stage, in terms of its political influence and trading power. (段首一個總分結構的句子,接下來給了3個分點展開。提示,支持一方觀點需要1-3個分論點。寫一個分論點的情況比較少,因為需要的展開太多。2個其實是最常見的)
However, there are others arguing that various other forms of progress are just as significant as the economic factors mentioned above. In particular, we should consider the area of social justice, human rights, equality and democracy itself. For example, the treatment of minority groups is often seen as a reflection of the moral standards and level of development of a society. Perhaps another key consideration when judging the progress of a modern country should be how well that country protects the natural environment, and whether it is moving towards environmental sustainability. Alternatively, the success of a nation could be measured by looking at the health, well-being and happiness of its residents. (段首轉折,并引出題目中的第二個要討論的觀點。In particular的后面給出了第一個. Another key consideration的后面給出了第二個)
In conclusion, the economy is obviously a key marker of a country’s success, but social, environmental and health criteria are equally significant. (262 words, band 9)(結尾標志詞+重申一遍自己的觀點)